*click*

"Sweetie, Daddy is trying to work, OK? One more picture and then you go play with your dolls, OK? You can do a fashion show and take pictures of them. Wouldn't that be fun?"

*click* *click* *click*

"OK, that's enough now. Honey? HEY, HONEY! Can you come get Penny? I need to finish this report! Honey?"

"She can't hear you."

"Why not? Where's Mommy, sweetheart? Is she outside?"

"The woman is in my capture device."

"What? Your... Penny, what's wrong? Why are you looking like that? Where's Mommy?"

"The woman is in my capture device. Along with the pre-reproductive one."

"Stop it, Penny, you're scaring Daddy. Don't look at me that way! What are you-"

*click*

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DoctorMikeReddy about 9 years ago

Not sure about the start as it felt like the father was "clicking" the daughter rather than being interrupted, and when we learn the true click meaning I wondered why she didn't just capture him. If you'd added "Daddy, stay still!" early on, maybe? But BUT what an amazing story, very reminiscent of Robert Heinlein; this does in a few words more than one of his Illustrated Man shorts!

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TimSevenhuysen about 9 years ago

Whoa, this took a very unexpected turn! :)

TonyNoland about 9 years ago

Thanks for reading, guys. Working from this prompt was interesting, especially as it combined a little kid with a monster image. Dr. Mike, I'm pleased it made you think of the Illustrated Man; as it happens, though, those were by Ray Bradbury. Heinlein, Bradbury... I'll take a comparison to either one!

DoctorMikeReddy about 9 years ago

Crap. Sorry. Wrong author. Right book though. Slip of the brain. Still brilliant

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