Eternal life.

That's what he'd promised, wasn't it?

Jane didn't know the tall, dark-haired man who had approached her late that night. He appeared as if an apparition as she exited the lonely subway terminal on the way home from an excruciating double shift.

He had spoken just two words. Eternal life. It was a dreamlike declaration - not quite a question, not a statement, just a whisper. But that was impossible.

She had looked at him with a mix of fear and curiosity before shaking her head and walking briskly up the dimly lit staircase. Just before walking into the damp street, she paused and turned. The man stood at the bottom of the stairs, his back turned.

"What's your name," she called.

"Safura", his voice floated back to her.

A thousand years is a long time to thknk

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jesse over 14 years ago

ugh, "think"

Galen about 14 years ago

Reading this again, I find it profound. What motivates a person to reject eternal life? Just the impossibility of it? Good story! Good questions raised.

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Prompt (write a story including these elements)

hero Jane
villain Safura
goal Eternal Life
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