I'm with stupid remarked the t-shirt. Very appropriate I thought considering the look on his face as he and his friend harried the younger boy. I wanted to step in but I had always shied away from confrontation. "If it gets and worse I'll step in" I told myself, hoping it wouldn't. In my reverie I never noticed who pulled the knife not that that mattered much, the result was still the same. He must have been stupid to have carried it with him.

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Gone Awry almost 14 years ago

Wonderful. I'm into forensics novels, so A+++!

sad19 almost 14 years ago

Wow! I didn't know you could write like this! You said a lot in not many words & with a good ending. Keep on writing.

Fablanta almost 14 years ago

I was panicking with 48 seconds to go so I make three mistakes that I found so far. The obvious one was 'If it gets and worse' which, I hope, I would have spotted had I had time to proof read. The other one was the title. I thought I had written something like, 'I'll step in in a minute' which would have made the title make more sense. The third makes the story seem deeper than I had intended so I shall remain silent about that one... for now.

Sammi almost 14 years ago

Aww, that's really sad.

Galen almost 14 years ago

@Fablanta: You can edit the title of stories you write, if you like. Just click "edit story details" up by the title.

Fablanta (joined almost 14 years ago)

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