The breeze blew gently in my face as i walked along the path. Suddenly, i witnessed this strange event:
Vive's feet hit the pavement. Her tiny cheerleading shoes barely made any noise as she ran. Suddenly, she ran smack into someone. "Hey! Watch where you're- Oh. It's you. Hi, Vive." he said. Vive looked up. It was Hestan. "Hi. What the heck are you doing out at this hour?!" said Vive, getting to her feet and brushing herself off {Which was completely pointless, considering it was raining.} Hestan matched her pace as she continued running through the park. "What are YOU doing running at this hour?" he asked. Suddenly, Vive fell to the ground. Hestan knelt beside her. Her face was turning grey, and her breath came in quick, short gasps. She was unconcious. Hestan did the first rational thing that came to his mind: called


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Gone Awry over 9 years ago

Hi! The author here! Just to let you know: last word:911.
And, if you want to know why Vive hit the ground, it's becuase a clot developed in her aorta, and she's going into cardiac arrest.

Gone Awry over 9 years ago

Hi! Here's me, the author again. If you liked this, read my stories Collapse 2 and Collapse 3. Collapse 4 is coming soon!

Gone Awry (joined over 9 years ago)

I have been many places, seen many things, been many things as well, but what I shall never stop being, is a writer, a traveler of dreams and the human soul. My name is none of your concern. Call me anything or nothing; I may not answer to anything, or answer to everything.

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