Hard to think now, gazing into her eyes as we lay side by side, that we'd only met on the train an hour ago. I'd been standing at first. She sat with a mother and two small kids, chatting away; she'd been so gentle, loving, playful with them. Occasionally, she'd look out the window. Several times she caught my eye in the glass, and smiled at my dimmer reflection. When the family got off at Bristol I sat down, the carriage empty now. We chatted about our lives, her boyfriend, my wife and grown up daughters. A generation gap meant nothing, and our whole world turned around.

Laying next to her, I knew the timing stank, but she was The One. A soul mate I'd searched for all my life. I felt like an old fool. Couldn't feel anything anymore. The only imperfection of her face, a face I knew I'd admire the rest of my life, was the blood trickling from the corner of her eye and nose. The light flickered and died, but some spark gave me glimpses of her. They wouldn't save her in time. She smiled apologetically. I did the same.

"Sorry" I said.

"It's ok. Next time."


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Fablanta almost 11 years ago

Well that was well worth 3 minutes of my life. I found the last sentence particularly intriguing.

Jumper almost 11 years ago

...nope, that's it.
-cries some more-

DoctorMikeReddy almost 11 years ago

Thanks to Galen for site fixes :-)

ganymeder almost 11 years ago

Oh, that was brilliant! Loved the end (yes, I read the ending comment). :)

ganymeder almost 11 years ago

~comment from Monsterbat

Interesting story! I liked it; basically it's an interesting story. :)

JessWest almost 11 years ago

Oh how tragic! They finally found each other at the end of her abruptly shortened life. Well done, Mike.

Gone Awry almost 11 years ago

Wow, I liked that! that was very good! such an interesting premise...

DoctorMikeReddy almost 11 years ago

I'd love this, and maybe a few others, to be a script for a short film. If anyone is interested, please contact me.

carebearsandpencils over 10 years ago

WOW. Amazing job, Can't wait to read more.

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I do all sorts of things. Mostly badly. Mostly better than others. I tell stories. Occasionally, I lie.

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