Once, in Beijing, a young girl in a red gown huddled in a doorway. Once, in Bucharest, a old man in a red scarf lost his way on a familiar street. Once, in Brooklyn, a young boy in red shoes ran home from school as fast as he could. Today, in a red coat, I found the answer to my final question.
Snow was falling bringing the kind of cold that made you huddle into your coat. I walked across a field I crossed every day. Hopped the stile and cut through a stand of trees to reach the bus stop. Not the driest way home but the shortest. It had been a long day. He called over and over. But I wouldn't talk to him. There was nothing else I needed to know.
It was darker earlier all the time now. Or maybe just now I was noticing. I didn't notice the bus.

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Galen over 13 years ago

I love the start to this story. The parallel sentences and the theme of red clothing are enchanting.

ganymeder almost 11 years ago

This was intriguing, but I'm not sure what happened at the end. Did he miss the bus?

meghanb8 (joined over 13 years ago)

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Once, in Beijing, a young girl in a red gown huddled in a doorway.
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